Script Table Read

After reading my script in a group, I then realised the mistakes that I made that need to be altered. I will have to alter it and add a small amount of dialogue on the end to make it up to 10 minutes as the ending is slightly gradual so to do this I would have to read it in detail to change the ending in order for me to improve it. However I have confidence that the story my script tells is original and clear. The way the story is told and they way I wrote it gives me confidence to be able to improve it. When reading this the audience was able to catch on to the story of what I was trying to put across. Although I need to add more detail to the ending:

where the triplets are sent to different foster parents from the care home after their mother leaving them and they end up meeting again at camp and plan to find their mum they eventually ended up finding their mum at their nan and gramps house because their mum told them she was going to live with them for a while in Spain till everything’s sorted.

I realised after the script table that it is too boring and didn't really make sense so I thought I would change it to the triplets still go to different foster parents and they meet again at a boarding school when taking part in a range of activities and as soon as half term comes they don't go home to their foster parents they visit their aunties house and asks her for help so they could find their mum again. Their auntie helps them and they find their mum at their Nan and gramps house in Spain. Whilst they are in Spain they persuade their mum to come home and explain how they found her and make her promise that she will never leave them again. They leave Spain and go home with their mum 2 days later and their mum rents a house for them to stay in until they find a house to buy again. After I have changed this I think I would have to incorporate some names for the mum as well.